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Thanks so much if you guys can help at all. I am working on proofreading a piece that needs to have zero mistakes. It is not for college submission, but it is supposed to be at that standard. I have run it by every adult I know and we are all baffled. If anyone on The Flood is particularly word-savvy please help me.
Here are a few that have "mistakes" (which are not identified for us)
I want to avoid schools located in flat dry areas, places without skiing, and regions with undesirable climates.
I am looking for a school with a fun and exciting atmosphere.
There are many more that I am working on my own, but I don't see anything wrong here. My professor might just be on too much coke I don't know.
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Edited by Durandal: 1/14/2013 1:53:24 PMI'd think there'd need to be a comma between "flat" and "dry." I'd try breaking up the first sentence. Too many commas in a sentence may be looked down upon. Also, "an exciting atmosphere" sounds kind of weird. Maybe "an atmosphere of fun and excitement."