originally posted in:CentauriAlpha Fan Fiction
A change is coming. Can you feel it, Guardian? Your life at the tower is going to change for ever. Just a pawn in the a battle... A war! Between the Light... And the Dark.
It has been a day since Stryker's fireteam destroyed the skiff on earth. They now are now on they're way to the tower."House of Ghost's, that's a badass name in my opinion" Largos said to his companions."They must has superior Command, skill, and Technology than the other Fallen houses" Gahhan said sounding worried." I know this must sound stupid, but do you think the other Fallen houses even know about it?" Stryker asked."Of course! How would they not. How would The Ghosts know to come to Earth in the first place!?" Largos told Stryker.
"I doubt we'll know until our next encounter with them, I'll send a message to the speaker to tell him of our findings" blurted Stryker's Ghost.
The Tower's dock opened as the large aircraft entered. The Speaker came into the hanger to great the Guardians."Hello, Guardians welcome back to the tower" said the Speaker as the guardians came out of the aircraft."Stryker, follow me" continued the speaker."Ok" replied Stryker. "We have finally hacked into Vex communications on Venus" The Speaker told Stryker, who's blue eyes were open with excitement and wonder."Did you find anything?!" said Stryker." Yes, but it was similar to your report on earth. A vex unit was attacked by an unknown fallen house. Of grey coloring" explained the Speaker." Do you think they are connected?" Asked Stryker." Yes I do" replied The Speaker.
Largos was leaning on the edge of the tower hub. He was working on his jammed "Up For Anything" auto rifle. All of the guardians heard a rumble, and a black hole opened up to reveal a grey Ketch, which then dispatched several skiffs on top if the city. Largos and his guardians all through out the Tower thought the same thing, No! No, no, no!
A trio of Skiffs bolted towards the Tower."SKIFFS! SKIFFS! GET THE CIVILIANS TO SAFETY! Yelled Largos. A hunter near the Cryptarch took his hand and led him to the Vanguard Mentor Room. The three Skiffs then hovered over The Skiff two smaller skiffs let out over a two dozen vandals, along with a few Captains, and 1 or 2 Servitors.
The larger Skiff had just one big dispatcher hole. A large Fallen jumped out of it, leaving a crack in the ground where it had landed.
As Gahhan came out of the hanger, he saw the large fallen."A KELL!" screeched Gahhan with is deep voice. He pulled out his pulse rifle, preparing to fire. The serviter shot a blast straight at him, which then knocked him out of the game. Stryker ran out of the Speaker's office to see the fallen skiffs hovering over the city, deploying troops by the dozens.
He ran to the edge of the peer to see the civilians in the city being mauled by the fallen House of Ghosts.
Tell me why you think!
Chapter 1: https://www.bungie.net/en/Forum/Post/113105535/0/0
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Though I do like the concept - a new fallen house being discovered, this work has a few grammar and spelling errors, such as, "for ever" should be all one word, "How would they not." should be a question, not a statement, and some words are capitalized when they shouldn't be like skiff, the ghosts, etc. But iron out the grammar bugs and such and this idea has potential
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New paragraphs when the speaker changes. Try to vary sentence structure. Also just proofreading. But overall quite good.
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To much use of the word skiff and ships Good job on part 2
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Awesome!