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5/11/2015 3:55:08 AM
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I'm working on a Destiny fanfiction!

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10708161/1/Lost-Light It's been on hiatus for months now due to other projects of mine, but I wanted to know what you guys think!

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  • I like what you've got so far; hope you won't mind a bit of constructive criticism: At the end of paragraph 2 / beginning of paragraph 3, you use the term "male Awoken" a little too frequently. Once you've identified him as male the first time, you might want to refer to him thereafter either as he/him; even better, by a given name.

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