*whistle* This is getting pretty interesting, it needs to be a little longer though. One thing you need to do is make each part have more depth. Maybe have a chapter fully focus on Dredgen with the oryx cameo at the end. It shouldn't feel like you are just making a chapter with a bunch of filler pieces. What I am trying to say is, as much as I love a ton of bruschetta, give me the big bowl of spaghetti, with the bruschetta on the side.