originally posted in:The New Dojo
[spoiler]Solid. Good recap of Fenrir's life with the references and metaphors. My only complaint with this is the beginning and your tenses. You seem to shift tenses in the same sentence in certain places. If you want to eliminate that, read your post out loud, or reread it a few times to see what you can find on your own. I usually try that with my stuff and clean it up a couple of times before posting it here.[/spoiler]
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[spoiler]Thanks. I'll keep that in mind the next time I post.[/spoiler]