[quote][b]Posted by:[/b] me123456789 [quote][b]Posted by:[/b] Wolverfrog I can never stick to self-imposed restrictions.[/quote] Good because when you told me you weren't going to write for a month I wanted to swim over there and slap you.[/quote] lmao why There are plenty of other good story's that could hold you down Here are some suggestions [url=http://www.bungie.net/Forums/posts.aspx?postID=50406174]The Conflict of Harvest[/url] [url=http://www.bungie.net/Forums/posts.aspx?postID=31052475]Halo 3: Insurrection[/url] [url=http://www.bungie.net/Forums/createpost.aspx?postID=51015189&act=reply]The UNSC Frigate BlueDwarf [/url] But this story truly is art so I cant blame you for having trouble waiting. How ever it does have its flaws Such being it removes new characters fast even if they had little impact mentioning would some times be best. Like how Sorran or any other main character ever mentions Savara again even thou Sorran was clearly love struck by her. I mean wouldn't you wonder what was happening to your girl while your pain is going on or even after you were saved. Maybe she could be introduced as a ninja like warrior to save Zharn and Ahkrin. You know she would be so heart struck about her love she would figure out where Zharn, go save him, and then ask him where Sorran is. After hearing the bad news she will slap Zharn silly and blow the ship up. but the whole ninja girl elite would be interesting and new being that no one has even thought of it. (I have and was going to add it for chapter 6 in my story but any on can use it being if they give me some small form of credit)