I could deconstruct and counter your every point, but seeing as how Fin already did that, it's sort of pointless. I just want you to know that next time you post something stupid like you just did, [url=http://docs.google.com/fileview?id=0B4iUh3dauqsjN2QzMjBjYzQtZGE2Ny00ZDUzLThlZTQtNDIwMDJjYTBjNTk3&hl=en]actually read the story first.[/url] And yes, maybe he made some mistakes at the beginning of this whole story, but in all due respect, that was 3 years ago. He does learn from his mistakes, and the best way to notice your mistakes is having lots of people read his story and pointing them out. What you did was you extrapolated on just the first chapter(s), which made you conclude that all must be bad and that this thing isn't worth reading at all. You are wrong. It gets better.