[quote][b]Posted by:[/b] Ringtail11
That last chapter was great Wolvers.
However "Death swung his scythe, and the funeral bells rang."
sounds a bit weak for the ending of the chapter. How could a funeral bell ring, a funeral implies that it was a planned event. Perhaps something like:
The air of life was seared, and the cold death knell tolled.
or
Death r@ped his sacred crop, leaving the rest to the brewing storm.
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Whilst what Wolvers wrote was no literary [i]magnum opus[/i], what you just suggested in its place sounds [i]abysmal[/i]...
[Edited on 10.25.2011 1:15 PM PDT]
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