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PART ONE IS UP!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Thanks for wating (I made this thread to replace the old one and show on this forum) I want opinions/ suggestions for future stories
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#Destiny
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In my opinion, it's an interesting idea and story plot, but it could use some fine tuning. Try editing it a bit, and make it to where it draws me in, makes me want to read it beginning to end.