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PART ONE IS UP!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Thanks for wating (I made this thread to replace the old one and show on this forum) I want opinions/ suggestions for future stories
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I just read it and I suggest writing it all out on paper. Then edit. When you make the transition onto paper you should be able to catch every single mistake. I liked where it was going though. I think you defiantly could have made it longer without adding new events. I thought its a good story and you should definitely continue.