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originally posted in:The Black Garden
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Edited by HeliosGaming:
7/16/2013 8:56:31 PM
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Fallen Destiny. (My Story.)
Well this is the first part of my story line that i just finished. Hope you all like it. I am open to criticism. It IS my first story, so don't blame me if it's bad. (I guess you technically can..since i did make it)
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Sx-y5hrCUqj2_emLFgF2DH0Wd1uuUCUa03mHEvE69bk/edit
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I liked this. Some tips: 1) Be careful when using words to references as "humans" and "fallen". Sometimes it's better to use other words to refer to them. This way you can prevent monotony in your story. 2) Be extra careful to make sure you edit your story before you submit it. Then wait a day or two, read again and when you are content submit it. If you're not, you rinse and repeat. 3) Most of all, don't forget to have fun. ;) I can see you enjoyed writing this. I hope to read more of you in the months to come. [b]-Akuto, also known as Cpt Starflare.[/b]
